some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In the modern world ,a burning issue arises that the batch of individual asked that economic development is the only
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the environment so it must be ended.I discuss
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also
give my opinion on
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foremost reason is that with the asset of economic growth
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hunger
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of money
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the poor once with they provide the amenities regarding
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,food and
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give the job opportunity to them and when
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by the
government
automatically the
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hungriness
and the
poverty
will remove from the
nation
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government
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all facilities to the mankind of
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and
poverty
is finished in their
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also
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pollute
the environment. Since, when the
authority
can increase the growth of economic
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more and more industry as well as companies in their
nation
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also
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experiment to grow the economic rate to remove the
hunger
and
poverty
from their
country
.
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, in 2020, a survey was monitored by the
authority
of Russia and the research the amount of smoke
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exhaust by the industries of the
nation
and after the result the
authority
was shocked because with more use of
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pollution
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at the level of 60%. To conclude, according to my opinion
both
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point of view.
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seen in some
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. So,
government
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want to choose another way to
vanish
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hunger
and
poverty
from the
country
.
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