In many countries in the world people buy cloths and choose hair style according to the latest fashion. Why is this hapening? Is this a positive or negative development?

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s doctors and scientists suggest consuming fruits which are seasonal and

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what we can call as fashion of nature and I think walking along with the nature is a positive sign.

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should happen to our well being.

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, Fashion is part of human nature, most of us want to be fashionable and want to showcase ourselves as trendy. Trying a new look and outfit is not just part of today's modern

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when we did not have even have the technology for making complex outfits, which are today part of our day to day life. At that time, whatever natural colours, leaves and other natural resources our ancestors had they used and tried unique clothing and appearance best in their capacity. So, now we can understand why looking futuristic is so much rooted in us. Fashion which is being used nowadays are not just trendy, but most of the time, these are comfortable

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, based on our current geographical demands.

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the world is designed in

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a way that anything having positivity has some negativity

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, they both co-exist. Here,

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race of being the most beautiful or handsome

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have some disadvantages. Hairstyling many times involve complex and chemically harmful treatment, which in long run can cause damage to natural hair in the long run or in rare cases immediate effects are

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seen. People are coming with new unique ideas of new dresses very quickly and because of

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what you buy today will be termed as outdated in just a few months time or some times in weeks

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. Now, those who are trendy will scrap the older one and go for

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new one and

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will be ultimately

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a waste

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e of resources. Many times those who can not afford

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ds of things

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try to copy other people and

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t can put them in debt.

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