some people say that children should star learning a foreign language when they are 7 years old, but other believe that they should start when they are 18 years old. discuss both views and write your opinion.

These days, one of the debatable issues is what ages would be fitted for starting a new
language
, some people believe that 7 years old is the best
age
, while others feel youngsters should begin it at
age
18.
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, there are many interpretations about
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phenomenon which come from the experiences of people, but I am of the opinion that children’s
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can be prepared to learn a new
language
at an early
age
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essay. Advocates of the
first
view express their idea
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reason that young people under the
age
of 18 can still show great skill at mastering the new
language
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in grammatical part , some researches which conducted by American linguistics explain that human can learn and analyze a
second
language
when they start school, as a matter of
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they believe the older you get the more difficult it is to learn a structure of new languages and
also
the proficiency of learning can be increased in young ages.
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group has an opposite prospect about
this
issue, they believe there is a critical window for a child in earlier ages to learn a foreign
language
. children have to focus on their native
language
until they
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because their
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are more organized to handle a new
language
.
Furthermore
,
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this
age
youngsters are able to choose their
second
language
with an extension horizon that what kind of
language
can be more appropriate for their future occupation. In conclusion, regardless
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has been discussed there are some advantages and disadvantages
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both views, my opinion is more alike to
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group because some positive points have been existed which worth considering to compare with the
second
one.
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