IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Many parents these days work in other countries, taking their families with them. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

#parents #work #countries #families #development
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In the modern era of globalisation, moving overseas with families to get high paid and more stable jobs is getting popular. I strongly believe that the advantages of these outweigh the disadvantages. I shall shed the light on various merits
such
Linking Words
 as getting an opportunity to get a better education , learning new cultures and languages and various demerits
such
Linking Words
 as forgetting one's own roots. To embark on it ,
Linking Words
first
Correct article usage
the first
show examples
 and foremost reason behind my opinion is that an individual along with his/her family will get many better amenities in healthcare , schooling, sports, jobs in comparison to their native country . They will learn more advanced skills and technologies which may not be present in their hometown.For an instance, An article published in The Tribune in 2019 reveals that more than 80% of people were benefited by living abroad and learning new skills made them more economically stable. Another striking feature of living overseas is learning new languages and cultures by meeting foreigners and getting adapted to their culture.These could bring numerous benefits to their personalities and help in broadening the horizons of their communication. A piece of evidence of it is a survey conducted by New York University in the year 2020 in which thousands of migrants along with their families expanded their businesses globally by learning communication overseas.
However
Linking Words
, there are some disadvantages of settling abroad
such
Linking Words
 as not being able to learn the morals and heritage of one's country which maybe lead to losing one's identity with respect to culture. They will not be able to serve their motherland more efficiently. In conclusion, there are more advantages of going to other nation along with their families as aforementioned with some disadvantages as well. But in my perspective growing globally with the rapid changing world will be more advantageous to an individual.
Submitted by amritpal.grewal0005 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: