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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

#experts #children #language #school
Few people believe that kids
these day
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 should learn other international
languages
 at a very early
age
instead
 of learning
it
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them
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 later.But I personally feel that learning
a
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languages
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languages
 at
very
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 early
age
 has its own
benfits
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benefits
.
Firstly
,Children can grasp
things
 faster at an early
age
 and learning a language at an early
age
 can help them live their life anywhere possible.So the essay strongly believes that having an
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 to learn a
foregin
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foreign
 language at an early
age
 is far
helpfull
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helpful
then
 learning it in secondary level of schooling. As we know primarily I would like to notify the
first
 point that children in their primary level of education
also
 known as a tender
age
 they can grab thinks quickly and can remember
things
 for a longer time.
However
,it is proven by many
scientist
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scientists
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 that
languages
 learnt at an early
age
 is picked up
more
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apply
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easier and can be memorized for a longer time.
Secondly
,when students are missed anywhere they can communicate anywhere with anyone all
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around
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round
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around
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 the world.So as they go to any exchange programs anywhere
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around
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round
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around
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 the globe can manage there without any discomfort.Anyhow,one of my friends who learnt the language at an early
age
 could understand anything as there was no
misintepretation
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misinterpretation
 by them.So she could express her thoughts easier
then
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 anyone. In the end,
i
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I
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 would like to summarize that
things
 learning the global
languages
on the whole
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, on the whole,
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 might overcome the fact that learning a
languge
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language
 at
an
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a
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 young
age
 helps to overcome
things
.
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