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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Immigrating to start a new life in a foreign country
that is
 difficult to speak that language might cause some serious social issues just like practical ones. I strongly agree with
this
 statement and I reckon that it can be really difficult. Immigrants might have some communication problems due to the different call the different cultures that the local
people
 and the new ones might have. When they tend to communicate in different ways, so they cannot connect together.
As a result
, they tend to be alone in a new country.
For example
, the rule of connecting is having dinner together in Iran even though it might be having a little chat out of the house in America. To sum up two families from these countries can not communicate together. In some countries,
such
 as Afghanistan or Pakistan local
people
 hate strangers and they cannot stand a person who is not related to them. In there, it's difficult to even talk to them especially to their women. If someone just talks to a female in there, the man would attack that person and stop him or her. All in ,all no stranger would be able to communicate with
people
 in these types of countries.
Although
 it would produce several social problems, it might become easy to live in a foreign country after sometimes
people
 tend to learn their culture and the way of living around others in. They are all humans, so they like to respect each other after finding some information about that place.
Also
, local
people
 would be nice together either.
For instance
, students in school might Have a kind of unhappy atmosphere at school in the beginning but after they talked to each other and know something about each other, they would become friends. In conclusion, living in a place which you are unfamiliar with there, might have some disorder which some of them can be solved while others are impossible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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