Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

In comparison with the
last
decade globalisation increasing in rocket speed. Particularly,
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growth in usage of social media and
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of cheaper flights around the world offered a chance to
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of Earth to visit newer places and discover other cultures.
However
, there are some people that are not in the same boat with whom has enthusiasm
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new things,
thus
, the opposition of these views will be discussed.
First
of all, for a person that working along the year could enjoy
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abroad trip as a reward given to oneself.
For example
, a person living in Europe will find millions of adventures in
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to tropic climates,
such
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ocean. These would recharge one’s mind and body by experiencing new things, and at least temporarily would remove
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of work.
Therefore
, trying new experiences would add up to us, rather than take.
On the other hand
, some of us would simply be annoyed to leave
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comfort zone, which they settled
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whole life and plans in there.
For instance
, familiar surroundings and people around let these types of people feel safe and confident in their daily life.
Therefore
, every new culture, cuisine or place is an obstacle for them to adjust their lifestyle
accordingly
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some
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and possesses investigating and learning attitudes, thereby, staying
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same place would seem boredom for them, they must show understanding for others too. At the end of the day, our world getting more linked and borders disappear every passing
second
, I think one must be
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and broaden own horizons by adventuring. Sharing our cultures and acknowledging each other is the only possible way for future generations to live in
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and harmony.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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