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5. The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease the violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this issue?

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For the purpose of reducing violence in
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society , some individuals requested policymakers to practice more control
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 the content of movies and
television
 programs.
However
, In my opinion,
goverments
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governments
government
 do not have the right to
interfer
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interfere
 with
such
 an issue for the following reasons.
First
 of all, there is no single evidence ,
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, that the content of what people watch on
television
 or on theatre has something to do with
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behavior
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, and undoubtedly, streets' crime incidents are a result of other social, financial and educational factors and are not simply connected to
peopl's
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people's
 favourite genre of films or
television
's show.
Moreover
, many studies in criminology revealed that exposing violent people to
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one hour of
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action film scenes on daily basis might be
benificial
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beneficial
 to mitigate the repressed anger and
hostality
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hostility
 in their
subconscience
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sub conscience
 and it is capable of reducing their intentions to harm
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others by 20%.
Secondly
, governments control on cinemas and
television
 programs could
interfer
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interfere
 with the free personal choice that human being has struggled for many centuries in order to enjoy.
In other
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 I am
affraid
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afraid
 that
such
 a practice might
allows
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 the political class pass to cross past the red line of
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 rights, and to establish
for
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the
dectatorship
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dictatorship
 of policymakers. In many developing countries, for illustration, governments have the right and power to stop
prodcasting
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broadcasting
podcasting
 any program or drama series, based on the claim of
society
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 protection against violent behaviour. In short, street violence and all kind of crimes are mostly a consequence of interacting social, financial, and educational factors ,
thus
, they are not related to the content of films or drama series being watched by individuals and
goverments
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governments
government
 should not practice any kind of audition on these artistic activities.
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