5.The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease the violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this issue?

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society , some individuals requested policymakers to practice more control
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the content of movies and
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programs.
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, In my opinion,
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do not have the right to
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with
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an issue for the following reasons.
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of all, there is no single evidence ,
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, that the content of what people watch on
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or on theatre has something to do with
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behavior
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, and undoubtedly, streets' crime incidents are a result of other social, financial and educational factors and are not simply connected to
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favourite genre of films or
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's show.
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, many studies in criminology revealed that exposing violent people to
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one hour of
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action film scenes on daily basis might be
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to mitigate the repressed anger and
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in their
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and it is capable of reducing their intentions to harm
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others by 20%.
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, governments control on cinemas and
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programs could
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with the free personal choice that human being has struggled for many centuries in order to enjoy.
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words
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that
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a practice might
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the political class pass to cross past the red line of
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rights, and to establish
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of policymakers. In many developing countries, for illustration, governments have the right and power to stop
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any program or drama series, based on the claim of
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protection against violent behaviour. In short, street violence and all kind of crimes are mostly a consequence of interacting social, financial, and educational factors ,
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, they are not related to the content of films or drama series being watched by individuals and
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should not practice any kind of audition on these artistic activities.
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