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the average prices per kilometer of clothing imported into the European Union from six various countries between 1993 and 2003.

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The given bar chart illustrates the information about the average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six various countries between 1993 and 2003. The general overview here is that Argentina indicated the majority of clothing prices per kilometre over the
period
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. According to the chart, it can be seen that in 1993 Argentine had the highest clothing price per kilometre at approximately 28
pounds
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, whereas Japan indicated at 15
pounds
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. There was a significant movement after a decade.
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 figure dropped slightly to around 26
pounds
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.
Similarly
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, Japan clothing price was slightly decreased to approximately 13
pounds
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 in the same
period
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.
On the contrary
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, China,India,Bangladeshi experienced a similar upward trend. By1993,China represented exactly 10
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; India indicated around 7
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 and Bangladeshi showed the least at 3
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. After passing 10 years. These figures rose steadily to 17pounds; 13
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 and 6
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 respectively.
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, there was a
period
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 of stability of 23
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 in Brazil throughout the
period
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 observed.
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