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Some people are born to be leaders, while others believe leadership can be learnt. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #leaders #leadership #learnt
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Some
people
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 say that
leaders
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 are born to be one but some argue that
people
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 can be trained to be
leaders
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. While it is true that some
people
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 have the
ability
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 to lead
others
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 naturally since
young
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, I believe that even those who do not naturally have the
ability
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 to guide
others
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 can be taught to become great
leaders
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. Some
people
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 are capable of showing
others
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 the way to do something and taking accountability since they were young.
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people
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 are easily distinguishable in the classrooms and are usually assigned to be the class leader. They are usually not
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 to initiate the duties that are given to the class, and often assign different tasks to the different classmates.
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, they would take responsibility should something
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 wrong with the duty. During my final year project, I recalled how my friend assigned
us
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 specific tasks and led our group
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 since she knew the weakness and
strength
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 of each team member.
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 way, she unconsciously took the leadership role of our project. Good
leaders
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 are not necessarily born with the skill required to head
others
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. There are a number of courses that teach us the essential skills to be a good leader. These courses offer a great opportunity to those who do not know what a good leader is made of, and they do not demand that their attendees must have leadership experience or skill to join the group. I was recently promoted to be a manager, and being a manager requires the capability to lead the team members. For
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, I was offered to attend a 5-day class that equipped me theoretically how to lead a team and achieve the goals together. In summary, possessing the
ability
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 to guide
others
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 naturally does not necessarily make them good
leaders
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.
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, I am positive that those without
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ability
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 can be trained systematically to be good
leaders
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