hese days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children's behaviour. Do you agree or disagree?

The charts show the data from
Australian
household
energy
use
and
Australian
household
greenhouse
gas
emissions
.
Firstly
, the major
sector
in
Australian
household
energy
use
is heating but in
Australian
household
greenhouse
gas
emissions
, heating is decreased by 27% from 42% to 15%. To compare with
most
Correct article usage
the most
show examples
positive change from the
energy
use
to the
greenhouse
gas
emissions
, other appliances
sector
plays a critical part here, from 15% to 28%, which is 12 digits change. The numbers which are similar to both charts are from water heating and cooling sectors. The water heating
sector
is increased by 2% from the
energy
use
30% to the
greenhouse
gas
emissions
32%,
also
same as the number from
cooling
Add an article
the cooling
show examples
sector
. The percentage of the cooling
sector
is slightly different by 1%.
Lastly
,
lighting
Correct article usage
the lighting
show examples
sector
is almost the smallest number from the
energy
use
and the
greenhouse
gas
emissions
by positive is change 4%.
Submitted by ckk.rrbc on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: