15. You’re interested in a music course that you saw on an advertisement. Write a letter to the club. In your letter, you should: - explain why you’re interested - request more information about the course - talk about your past experiences.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with regards to an advertisement published on the Bangkok Musical website

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week. I would like to ask you

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detail about a

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course for beginners. According to the posted article from your website, I believe that the instructors at your school are professional.

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, listening to

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music makes me feel

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and calm.

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the reason why I started to look for a music course. I would like to know how many students

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each class because I prefer a small class

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a large class.

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, I would be appreciated if you could send me more information about the payment process.

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, I had

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experience of playing

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guitar

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. When I was young, I took a

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course for 10 hours. At that time, I did not enjoy playing it, as it was too difficult to understand tone and rhythm.

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, now I follow a Youtuber who is young and talented to play

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, and I want to become like him. I look forward to hearing from you. Sincerely, Jenny Chan

kanokwann.joy

Nov 14, 2021

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Students are becoming more and more reliant on technology. What are some of the problems associated with reliance on computers and what are some of the possible solutions?

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Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. Explain the main causes and effects of this problem and suggest some possible solutions.