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Many people think that libraries are essential for society. Others, however, disagree and say that it is more practical to access information on computers, while libraries are a waste of money and resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Through the
ages
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 public
libraries
 stayed the place where anybody can gain the knowledge collected by the
last
 generations of
people
. Nowadays, since computers have been invented, more and more individuals consider that book rooms are just a waste of money for society. But despite that, there are many
people
 who think the opposite. In
this
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 I will try to discuss both points of view and say my own opinion.
Firstly
, in the modern, more and more
people
 gain computers or other electronic devices (smartphones, tablets) which can carry out computer functions in the side of deriving information. More and more programs and applications that help
people
 to read are developed by the modern coding industry.
However
, most applications are created for commercial purposes and require money for use.
Nevertheless
, we live in a time when information has never been so accessible to everyone.
On the other hand
, there are a lot of
people
 who cannot afford to buy a smartphone or computer, who live in regions with poor internet access or absence of any access, particularly in developing countries. Exactly for
such
people
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 the public
libraries
 have to be in existence, performing the function not only as a source of new information but to be a window in the modern world and to discover new opportunities for personality development. In conclusion,
although
 the
libraries
 role in the life of average
people
 is decreasing due to the wide distribution of computers, book rooms still have an important place in society. In my opinion, public
libraries
 need to be preserved and transformed into other forms
such
 as public spaces where everyone can meet friends and neighbours and discuss their community problems.
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