Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The
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zoo
is a place that keeps a collection of wild
animals
. Some believe that
such
places are inhumane, so they should be closed, while others argue that these areas are useful for rescuing rare
animals
. Both views as well as my opinion will be discussed in
this
essay. On the one hand, many people believe that
zoos
should be banned, they treated
animals
harshly.
Firstly
,
animals
are Gods
creature
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, they can feel like
human
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being
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, when we keep
animals
in cages, they feel uncomfortable. Studies report that many
animals
in
the
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zoos
have
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person
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.
Also
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their health is not good in the
zoo
, because they need more space.
Secondly
,
animals
belong to the wild, they like to move around. Wild
animals
hunt other
animals
for their livelihood and in
this
situation
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they forget how to live in
zoos
. When
zoo
officials leave
animals
in the forest, they do not survive alone. They need people to feed them.
However
, other people believe
zoos
play an important role
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wildlife conservation. The main reason is that many
animals
are in danger of extinction and
zoos
are the only place to save them from hunters.
In addition
, due to deforestation, many
animals
are forced to move to other places. They do not have access to their usual environment, which is why the Forest Department takes care of the
animals
and places them in
zoos
. In my point of view, it is better if the
zoo
is a place to keep endangered
animals
and
animals
that cannot take care of themselves. In conclusion, both views have their positive points,
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  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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