Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that
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production
companies
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are using while preparing and
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and
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products
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maximum of
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and because of that many
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get affected and face
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issues.
Companies
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should make sugary
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more costly so that they encourage individuals to use less
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in their daily life. I totally agree with the above statement.
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,
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and
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manufacturing
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should not add
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products
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while making a
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, but because of their profit and branding, most of the packed
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products
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which we are buying from the market is containing too much
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, and there are not healthy, the local authority should take strict action towards the production company or force them to increase the
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of these
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. Because it's affecting the
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of the individual's
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.
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it is a very easily available
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in the market and it's highly dangerous for
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. So many
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problems are caused because of
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gaining weight as well as diabetic , obesity those are consuming
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more in their daily life.
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, if the company will increase the
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of
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people
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will not buy much or they will buy other healthy items which may give good
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to them. the excess eating habits of
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can cause major
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issues and death
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. For ,instance,
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contains more
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in their
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and most
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drinks
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coke
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however
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they know that
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is very much harmful to our
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. If the company increases the
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of
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so definitely some
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will prefer to have other
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than
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for example
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like
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cane which will be more healthy. To conclude, most production
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are using more
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while making
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or
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items. I believe their
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should be increased so
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will think to buy or they will choose other items to buy. it's affecting most of the nation's
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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