Some people say that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries is a positive development, while others think that many countries will lose their national identities as a result. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

In
contemporary
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world, globalization is a worldwide tendency.
Although
some
individuals’
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reliance
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on the merits of
this
, others are
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about it. I will examine both sides before the final conclusion is drawn. On the one hand,
integration
can fuel the development of
economy
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the economy
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.
This
is because when
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countries
all around the world maintain the interaction, the
potentials
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of each country can be identified and made use of.
For example
, as
Viet Nam
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and the USA keep a friendly relationship, the investment between
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countries
can be stable, leading to the economic prosperity of both
countries
.
Moreover
, globalization may open up avenues for cultural exchange.
As a result
, dwellers from different
countries
can widen their understanding
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other
countries
’ values,
consequently
, it will fortify the unity between different nations.
Hence
, it is obvious that
integration
poses numerous benefits.
On the other hand
,
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business and cultural contact can
also
make the country run the risk of losing national traditions.
This
is to say, currently, youngsters in many Eastern
countries
are biased towards the Western culture but forgetting the values of national heritages, or even criticize the traditions of their nations, resulting
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deterioration of patriotism.
Furthermore
,
integration
is likely to cause horrendous problems for some developing
countries
if they depend excessively on developed
countries
investment
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investments
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.
Consequently
, some developing
countries
will lose their financial independence,
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a result, the will be instability of
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economic state.
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,
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globalization can not be seen as entirely positive.
To conclude
, despite the fact that
integration
and interaction between
countries
still
holds
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some demerits, I totally subscribe to the notion that the upsides of
this
tendency always surpass the downsides.
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