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Some people argue that arts, such as paintings and music, are a waste of money and the government should spend its money on other public services instead of arts. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some humans believe that government should invest in public
services
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such
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 as film, media,
newspapers
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 and so on rather than
arts
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. In my strong belief, I would contend it is better to pay much more attention to all public
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 except the
arts
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.
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 and other public
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. On one hand, paintings and music as different types of
arts
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 could play a significant role in the awareness of
people
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 about social problems.
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, a painter could imagine a bad economic situation or a musician could show his/her happiness with respect to a national achievement. But these public
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 require strong financial resources for production.
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, their productions are very expensive for ordinary
people
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 who intend to purchase them.
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, other public
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 like
newspapers
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, sites, films and things like that are
easy-accessible
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 for ordinary
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 that they pay less money about it.
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, these are very interesting for all ages.
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, elderly
people
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 strictly tend to read
newspapers
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 and listen to the radio.
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, women are a strict fond of films and youngsters are always involved with the internet and sites. By way of conclusion, in
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arts
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 and other public
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 like
newspapers
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 and film were compared. In my point view investing in
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 is equivalent to wasting money in spite of their benefits for society and
newspapers
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, films, books and so on are the best due to being accessible and interesting.
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