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Whoever controls the media also controls the opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little that can be done to rectify this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
 often argue that
media
 controls the opinions of the
people
 and the general public and there is a lack of actions that are needed to resolve
this
. Well, I disagree with
this
 belief as I feel that
media
 is essential for the development of
people
 and that it’s up to the viewers’ discretion as per what they perceive from the content. It is very hard to diminish our reliance on
media
 resources and as every society needs some sources of
information
 in order to acquire the knowledge they need and the updates of the globe or at least, in their respective spaces. From scratch to the very zenith,
media
 helps in enlightening and updating
people
 on various fronts that not only helps them in taking prudential decisions but
also
 mitigates and assuages the perils of traversing a wrong path owing to the lack of knowledge and reality. Every member of society needs to get
information
. Without that, it would not be possible to involve in social, cultural and economic activities.
For example
, in order to trade successfully, companies should be aware of the situation in the global market, or
people
 should be provided with social, cultural and political
information
 in order to know what is happening around them. From
this
 aspect, it is clear that for
people
 it is very hard and nearly impossible to ignore
media
 sources as our society heavily depends on the
information
.
Additionally
, with the right frame of mind,
people
 can conquer the domain they are inclined towards with the help of the disseminated
information
 through the
media
. Though some say, the liberalisation of
media
 hampers the thought processes of
people
 by shaping their belief systems through caricaturing the real
information
 in their own ways,
however
, I feel that it is not right and in fact, help
people
 in passing through the gates of misinformation. Conclusively, It could be said that
media
 plays a vital role in updating
people
 all across the globe and that if looked at the presentation with judicious use of the intellect, it is the best source of
information
 that one might ever have.
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