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An international language would remove one of the main differences which separates people of different nationalities and this would lead to greater international understanding and co-operation. There should be one international language which everyone agrees to learn and speak. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many
people
 believe that using
one
 international
language
 would remove differences which separate
people
 of different nationalities and lead to greater understanding and co-operation , both viewpoints will be discussed in the
next
 paragraphs and I will give my own opinion. On the
one
 ,hand using
one
 International
language
 globally will bring
people
 together more, build more trust, create great relationships among individuals , eliminate the stress and reduce the cost of having to learn different languages and dialects. Uniformity in
one
language
 generally all over the world,
for
example
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 the use of English
language
 in most part of the world leads to better understanding and co-operation, makes international transactions
such
 as trade , travel very easy and simple as everyone communicates in
one
language
 which makes humans feel at home and more relaxed.
On the other hand
 in as much as using
one
language
 is prefered by some
people
, we should know that it might make us forget our mother tongues which
is
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 not good culturally , for ,example 80% of children globally don't know how to speak their native dialects because they grew up learning and speaking
one
language
 been used worldwide, and which most times when they travel to their homelands, they naturally act like strangers because they can't communicate in their native
language
 and
this
 makes them dissociate themselves from their communities. In conclusion, in as much as using
one
language
 is very good and aids easy communication globally , in my ,opinion I think it is wise for
people
 to
also
 learn and speak their native languages which makes them rooted to their families and communities.
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