With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends. To what extent do you agree?

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become more closer to each

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time period, along with that now the

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connection will be

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stronger and wider. While online connections

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,I personally believe, offline interactions can not be denied. No doubt,

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without feeling of

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, through which the foreign sitting

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can communicate with their nears and dears just with a single click of

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. It does not stop here, in coming years, it would be expected of new technology, through which everyone can feel the touch of things as well as persons. So, it is the only way to contact

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our friends and family members which can not be ignored.

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their own importance.These will not only

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the personality and behaviour of

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blood donation on the support and many more, So somewhere new

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stronger and should be prioritized.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

connectivity
geographical gaps
interact
social media platforms
messaging apps
revolutionized
physical distance
online communities
camaraderie
immediate surroundings
unparalleled opportunities
superficial relationships
excessive reliance
emotional warmth
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digital divide
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