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everybody should donate a fixed amount their income to su8pport charity how far do you share this viwpoint

#everybody #amount #income #su8pport #charity #viwpoint
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In the modern world supporting
charity
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 is a subject that maybe
people
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concerned
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are concerned
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 about it and
everybody
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 should contribute a fastened amount of their
income
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 to
support
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charity
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. It seems to me, supporting
charity
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 is not a
force
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 for
everybody
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 because
the
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of the
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 difference
of
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in
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 incomes levels and
long
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long-distance
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distance
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distances
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among
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between
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 poor and rich
people
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, so
that is
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 relative to their
circumstance
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circumstances
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.
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First
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The first
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 statement,
people
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 who are jobless or have low
salary
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salaries
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 because of economic pressure cannot donate a fixed amount of their
income
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 to
support
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charity
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for
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,for
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 example, their living
cost
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costs
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such
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 as, food, wearing, electricity and more items that
not
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are not
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 covered with their salary or
income
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 so, supporting
charity
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 maybe is not
force
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 for
everybody
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.
In
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opposite
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the opposite
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 side,
people
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 with superb and high
income
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 can donate a fixed amount of their salary to
support
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charity
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for
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,for
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 example, cover
cost
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the cost
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 of orphan`s living
such
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 as
,
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apply
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 food, dress, education fee and for aged
people
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 maternal and spiritual helping for satisfaction about themselves. Based on
this
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 attitude,
everybody
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 should allocate funds for supporting charities and it is
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force
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a force
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 for them. In conclusion, based on my
view point
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viewpoint
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, it is not possible for all
people
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 to
support
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charity
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 and it
is not
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is not forced
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force
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 for
everybody
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 because of
difference
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different
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level
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levels
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 of
income
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however
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,however
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, in
other attitude
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another attitude
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 there is no
different
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difference
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 among poor or rich
people
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 and
everybody
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 with any circumstance should donate a part of their
income
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 to cover
charity
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 costs.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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