Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic. “Parents should not pressure their children to choose a particular profession. Young people should have the freedom to choose a career path they like. To what extent do you agree or disagree?” You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence

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Young
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have their own dream
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so that
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should not force their
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to choose what the
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want. Because it will affect the way how young
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reach their target. I totally agree with
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argument with some reasons supporting that statement.
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, if the
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support
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their
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to achieve what
career
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path they like, it will motivate the
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to achieve their
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in their own way, and the outcome will most likely be good as well.
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, if a child has a passion to be professional athlete, typically they will work hard to exercise every day with the particular discipline program and will join a club to
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their target until he or she can be a professional athlete by competing in some sports tournaments, either local or international. He or she will consistently participate in the competition until he or she can achieve the highest award that he or she would like to achieve. Without
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from his or her
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, it would be very difficult to achieve.
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, if the
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request from their
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does not match with the passion that the
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want, it will discourage the
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and obviously, the outcome will not be satisfied as well. Nowadays, there is a lot of new
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opportunities. Sometimes, the
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ask their
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to be a doctor, police, or engineer.
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, in
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current era, there are many new positions in the job market. If the choice from the customer does not relevant to the
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want, it will affect the process to achieve it as well,
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, they will not be interested to go to school, their school grade is bad, and
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, they will be failed to achieve it. In conclusion, the
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should
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what their
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want to be, because ,with the
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support
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, it will motivate the
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to achieve their dreams with their own effort.
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is important to be done, starting from school. Along the way, the
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will work and be satisfied with the result that they want.
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