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The bar chart compares six different countries in terms of the amount of annual spending of guests to visit New Zealand between 1996 to 2014. Overall, the figure for spending of people coming from
Australia
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, the
USA
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,
UK
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 increased significantly, while that coming from
Japan
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 and
China
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 went up slightly.
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,
Australia
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 was the country which spent the most over the period shown. In 1996, at
NZ
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$ 1.000, the amount spent by foreigners from
Australia
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 in New Zealand was highest, minimally higher than that from the
USA
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, and nearly double than that was spent from
Japan
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 and
UK
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 with a share of approximately
NZ
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$495 and
NZ
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$496 respectively. Meanwhile,
China
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 modest portion of the spending by foreigners, at
NZ
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$1. In 2006, while the figure for
Australia
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, the
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,
UK
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witnessed dramatic growth to
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$ 2.400,
NZ
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$ 1.350 and
NZ
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$650 in turn, those of
Japan
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 and
China
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 rose slightly to
NZ
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$ 600 and roughly
NZ
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$ 350 respectively. There was a steady decrease to
NZ
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$2000,
NZ
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$1.100,
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$900, and
NZ
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$500 in turn in the amount spent by guests from
Australia
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, the
USA
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,
UK
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, and
Japan
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 in 2014. A slow rise to
NZ
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$600 was seen in the figure from
China
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 in 2014.
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