In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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nowadays,
people
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face many
health
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issues due to their habits. in some
countries
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people
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who
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are getting fatter and struggle with
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problems and
body
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strengthen.
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believe that consuming unhealthy
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and
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with works
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briefly account the steps
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forward
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issue.
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of all, in the fast-paced era,
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every thing
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modernised in the world.
people
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eager to intake unhealthy
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. due to the cosmopolitan
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everyone prefer to consume a variety of meals and show interest in processed
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as well because of the taste and less
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count.
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, it is the more chances to get fat easily even they able to suffer from obesity. in
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case, they are affected with
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problems
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as diabetes and high level of cholesterol.
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, modern society is busy with their works cause home expensive of living cost.
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case, they do not have sufficient
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to
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exercises daily. sitting on a chair for a long
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make fat and weakness of the
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.
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, the new generation is facing a major issue is heart problems because of neglecting the diet habit and exercise. so that, each one must be considered about their
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and fitness.
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, to resolve
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problem,
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or offices must provide spare
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for doing physical activities in the office.
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will encourage them to make
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and fitness of the
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.
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, the government has to be punished for unhealthy
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.
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of
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, they never do
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mistakes again which is the best pathway for their better
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and strength
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mind. to conclude,
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must control their
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condition by intaking healthy
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rather than fast
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and exercising regularly themselves and as a government should punish unhealthy
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to resolve
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issue.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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