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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

#people #information #research #business #world
Some individuals suggest that telling private
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impact
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others prefer to demonstrate everything
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This
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information
 becoming more private
everyday
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 due to
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safety reasons. Scientists and teachers do not present their developments to
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other people, because it might cause plagiat and somebody could steal their idea. It
also
 happens to businesses, who tend to share the same project on the market.
For instance
, there are a lot of works on the work branches, which were developed by different companies, but they have
similiar
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similar
 scheme with
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.
On the other hand
, the community should feel free to share the
information
 they have.
Moreover
, the company can create a product, which will bring the choice to everybody.
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 a course, you can produce
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limited access or a brief topic of the full idea. It might help you to avoid making the project devalued.
Furthermore
,
concurents
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 could think of the idea how to increase and develop their work. To my view, I suppose, that we have to share
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information
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 because there are a lot of
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materials, which have secret components in
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. So,
this kind
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 of
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have
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 to stay private and
confidentional
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confidential
. In conclusion, I agree, that all of the data should be limited for usage to the others
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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