the maps show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now and plans for its development
The two maps display the changes
of
a small Change preposition
in
town
's centre, Islip, from current
form to its planned development.
Correct pronoun usage
its current
Overall
, it can be seen that the town
centre will be developed by having more entretianments
, residential areas, and better infrastructures.
Currently, there is a Correct your spelling
entertainment
entertainments
mian
Correct your spelling
main
road
pass
through the Replace the word
passing
town
from the west to the east, which having
many shops along both Change the form of the verb
has
side
of the Change to a plural noun
sides
road
. Apart from that, there is a school located in the west, south of the main road
, while
a park
situated
on the east of the Add a missing verb
is situated
town
. There are residential areas between school
and Correct article usage
the school
park
.
Moving to the proposed development, the main Correct article usage
the park
road
will be deconstructed and replaced by the dual carriageway, which cycle
the Change the verb form
cycles
town
. Inside the carriageway, the northen
shops are converted Correct your spelling
northern
to
a bus station, a shopping centre, a carpark, and a new housing area. There will be a small street, only for people to walk, Change preposition
into
lies
across the middle of Correct pronoun usage
which lies
this
facilities
area. The shops ,Change noun form
facility's
where
is south of the main Correct word choice
which
road
, housing areas, and school will stay in the same site. However
, the park
will be downed side due to
the constrution
of the new residential area, located Correct your spelling
construction
next
to the west side of the park
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