the maps show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now and plans for its development

the maps show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now and plans for its development
The two maps display the changes
of
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a small
town
's centre, Islip, from
current
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its current
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form to its planned development.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
town
centre will be developed by having more
entretianments
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entertainment
entertainments
, residential areas, and better infrastructures. Currently, there is a
mian
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main
road
pass
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through the
town
from the west to the east, which
having
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many shops along both
side
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of the
road
. Apart from that, there is a school located in the west, south of the main
road
,
while
a
park
situated
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on the east of the
town
. There are residential areas between
school
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the school
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and
park
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the park
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. Moving to the proposed development, the main
road
will be deconstructed and replaced by the dual carriageway, which
cycle
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the
town
. Inside the carriageway, the
northen
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northern
shops are converted
to
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a bus station, a shopping centre, a carpark, and a new housing area. There will be a small street, only for people to walk,
lies
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across the middle of
this
facilities
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area. The shops ,
where
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which
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is south of the main
road
, housing areas, and school will stay in the same site.
However
, the
park
will be downed side
due to
the
constrution
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construction
of the new residential area, located
next
to the west side of the
park
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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