Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarket in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

With the progress in the work

area

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many small

businesses

such

as local markets have started either to grow and become supermarkets or could not resist these novelties. Some

people

are of the opinion that

closure

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of these local

businesses

does

lots

of harm to native communities. I agree with the argument that there is a crucial balance between these communities and

facilities

since building up of local areas

people

will start to look for new job opportunities and they will have to leave from their environments or they will continue to stay but will have to change their attitudes.

First

and foremost, the extinction of small

facilities

adversely affects the native

people

. With the industrial

revolution

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factories become more prevalent and enable

lots

of

people

to new job conditions but it

also

led to small

facilities

to die

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out. The more employee picked out to work in these advanced factories

instead

of struggling with small

businesses

problematic situations the more these old fashion

facilities

were left.

For instance

, in my city we can not see

lots

of small

businesses

mostly, these ones are a franchisement of the combined

facilities

. I have to concede that the intimacy of old fashion

facilities

can not be found in these new places. If you need something and you can't purchase it due to the lack of money you have to give up on that item until you gain money but thanks to the closeness between local business and

people

you can pay back it when your situation is convenient.

On the other hand

, the connection between traditional workplaces and native

people

is a force to be reckoned with. Having lived in a certain place for so many years human beings become a part of these environments, they start to set up works and sustain it, yet influences of big corporates force them to compete with each other. I have

lots

of

people

around me beating up each other just because of the disposal about work. In earlier, owners were more friendly

each

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other since they didn't have obligation to see other owners as a rival, but today no matter how close you are if you are working at the same kind of job you have to make them accept your superiority. To sum up, big

corporates

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fields has put local

businesses

in a dire state. It either will kick them

of

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by closing their workplaces or force them to alter their behaviours for each other. Either way poses a serious challenge to communities.