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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
It is undeniable that
Internet
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 explosion is obvious in our recent era. In
this
 concept,
traditional
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 paper
product
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 become a controversial issue. Numerous people claim that paper newspapers or
books
 will have no place in
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 market due to the capability to access free materials online. In my opinion, I partially agree with
this
 statement, which would be explained
further
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To begin
 with, it is agreeable that nowadays we could easily access
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variable materials
by
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 only
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lice. Thanks to internet development, publishers all around the world could pose their produce on an appropriate version on
online
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 market,
hence
 users could purchase their needed
books
 or magazines easily regardless
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 their geographic obstacles or time difference.
For example
, by a mouse-click on Amazone, I
conld
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could
 own a valuable
text-book
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, published by Elsevier from the US, on my cellphone
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 its proper format, which I could bring along
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everywhere.
Therefore
, it is true to confess the value of portable
books
 and newspapers.
Nevertheless
, I do believe traditional
books
 possess unreplaceable worth.
In other words
, reading on papers would enable the high concentration and prevent some potential adverse effects caused by electronic devices.
For instance
, some researches
shown
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 that reading real
books
 would reduce orbital diseases due to blue light
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.
Moreover
, valuable reading produce is not always free-accessed online. In conclusion,
thriving
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 of the Internet is remarkably helpful for people to satisfy their reading
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.
However
, those portable materials are not always the optimal choice. As a consequence, papers have
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 unique value for their existence.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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