Some parents guide their children’s education towards specific careers, such as in engineering, medicine or law. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child who has this kind of parental guidance?

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Some
parents
think that if they choose specific future jobs like engineering, medicine or law for their
children
, their
children
can get more benefits.
This
essay will discuss the positive sides of guiding
children
’s education by their
parents
, as well as, the negative aspect of
this
approach. On the one hand, mainly
parents
want their
children
follow
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them,
therefore
, they want to choose specific
careers
for their
children
and it is obvious that
children
can get more benefits in
this
way.
This
means, if
children
choose subjects which related to their
parents
’ job, probably they will
successful
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because their
parents
can help them for
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appropriate skills which related to
this
jobs. More importantly,
this
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situations
use all over the world for years and we can show many successful persons
who their
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parents
choose specific
careers
for them.
Consequently
,
this
approach can be used
some
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situations
which
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children
want to work these jobs as well.
Moreover
, school students do not
need
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spend more time
for
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finding appropriate
careers
path. On the one hand,
this
kind of parental guidance can be useless and cannot be used in some
situations
that
children
do not think the same
with
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their
parents
.
For example
, if
parents
force their
children
for choosing
career
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path which
parents
want, probably
this
type of
children
cannot
successful
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because of the lack of interest.
This
means that it is no secret that
children
will be reluctant to work in
this
field and probably they will not give many benefits to other persons which will be these
children
’s customers.
As a result
,
although
this
approach can be useful, sometimes it cannot work for some
type
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types
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of
children
and in some
situations
.
Furthermore
,
also
it can cause some problems,
for instance
, if these
children
will be a doctor, they can harm
to
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their patients. In conclusion,
although
this
type of parental guidance can help
to
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their
children
for their future job
careers
, it is still unimportant in today’s world.
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