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With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
at
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in
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 the age of
technology
 and internet connection,
face
 to
face
 gathering seems to be an ancient thing. In order to communicate, the population prefers the latest
technology
 so that they have
whereabouts
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 of their known ones from far. With the coming
time
,
people
 have changed their way of communication. They are able to converse with their acquaintances through networking sites which include Facebook, Whatssup and many more. It made
convenient
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it convenient
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 for
people
 to know about how others are feeling and living.
Additionally
, there is no need to travel which means saving
time
 from traffic congestion. Another concern is that there is no
time
 limit for having
conversation
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. We can make
record
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a record
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 and video calls whenever and wherever we want.
Thus
,
this
 habit brings each and every individual closer. In case of emergency, texting helps
people
 to know where to meet their loved ones.
Therefore
,
internet
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 and text messaging have done it for all. As we all everything comes with flaws. One
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of
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if
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of
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 the biggest disadvantages of interacting through
technology
 are a wide gap created between human beings.
Moreover
, everything will become temporary due to less contact.
Thus
, it will be much difficult to make friendships
last
 for a longer
time
.
In addition
,
face
 to
face
 assembly will eventually fade away with
time
.
Therefore
, the more use of
technology
 made
people
 forget how to behave socially. As they meet each other rarely, they forget
who
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whom
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 to greet others with their body language. To conclude,
although
 new modes of communication
is
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are
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 changing the way
people
 contact, the traditional person to person contact is still a predominant way of conversation.
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