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Some people are of the opinion that we must discontinue using fossil fuels and adopt renewable sources of energy. Yet others feel that renewable sources of energy are not as dependable as fossil fuels. Discuss both views.

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Some would argue that people should stop consuming fossil fuels and start using reusable
energy
. While others say that renewable
power
 is not consistent as with petrol, diesel. While using gasoline and other related
energy
 is much easier to obtain. I believe using another source of
power
 is much reliable because fossil fuel will be running out sooner due to high usage. On the one hand use of non-renewable source are much easy to generate and it will provide a short-term solution for
energy
 need.
In other words
 to generate fossil fuel the industry only requires digging up the oil wells.
However
, even it is much easier the consequence of the usage is much higher. Fossil fuels are the main reason for greenhouse gases like CO2. for an instance, the daily carbon footprint in India has occurred air pollution in their capital.
On the other hand
, alternative
power
 sources are much environmentally friendly than using Gasoline. Environmentally friendly sources are much harder to generate and the amount of time
that is
 taken to collect is higher than regular gas.
Although
 the
power
 is generated in small quantity it is much safer. With the high usage of
this
 non-renewable
energy
, it is currently in the process of running out. Once used up there are no other options than to use alternatives.
For instance
, the oil wells in the Middle East have reduced their production by 25%. In conclusion, traditional fuel
such
 as petrol and, diesel is much convenient to adopt with environmental damage and it is running out.
However
, the adoption of non-traditional sources like wind, sunlight is much safer and will be effective in the long run.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fossil fuels
  • Renewable energy
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Intermittent energy supply
  • Energy storage
  • Infrastructure
  • Climate change mitigation
  • Depletion of natural resources
  • Energy efficiency
  • Technological advancements
  • Cleaner alternative
  • Energy supply stability
  • Investment in infrastructure
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