Some people argue job satisfaction is more important than job security. Others believe a permanent job in more important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The world is becoming more challenging day by day
morever
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more
moreover
people
is moving like crazy. Some
people
think about
job
pleasure whereas some
people
are happy with their permanent
job
.Both are important in
this
competitive world. Some
person's
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people
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are more conscious about their mind, their
satisfaction
despite
of
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their
money
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crisis. They always prefer their
pleasent
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pleasant
in
job
field because of their mentality.
However
,they are crazy about their
satisfaction
and they always expect from everywhere.
As a result
, they always search their mind pleasure in their work area.
For example
: I know a person who changed his
job
several times for his bad environment in his
job
sector. I asked him why are you changing
your
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job
like crazy where you have a family as well. He told me I can change it many more times if I don't get any
satisfaction
. On the other side, some
people
prefer
job
security or
permanent
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job
instead
of
job
satisfaction
,because they think it is valueless if you show
you
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your
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emotions in the
profession
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area.That
people
want to work hard and do not expect any
satisfaction
from their professional field.
For instance
, I saw in my office
that kind
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of
people
and they are very efficient as well as honest. They are working years after years without any expectation. I ask them, why are you doing it like
robot
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? They told me because we have to continue our
job
for our family and
this
job
is permanent.
Satisfaction
does not matter.
However
,
people
can think in both ways. Every way is perfect in several aspects.I think you have
abserb
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absorb
absorbed
whatever you think.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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