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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

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People
 have different views about whether to do the same or new
things
 during
people
's
life
. While I accept that changing has
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 effect on
life
, I believe that occasionally
people
 need to avoid changes and try to concentrate on one thing. So I will discuss
this
 in greater detail in my essay. On the on side of the argument, there are
people
 who are willing to trace the routine and do not want to experience new
things
. They believe that you should choose one plan and make effort to achieve the best stage in your
life
. A particular example here is that skilled workforce finds it difficult to change their job, they stay and tolerate
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such
 as low salaries, uncomfortable workplace and unsuitable manager, because they do not want any changes. So, they are deprived of having new opportunities in the world.
On the other hand
, there are individuals who experience new
things
 because they believe that
life
 is short,
Thus
, they try to reach the higher levels and believe that the world is so enormous and it is worth that to spend time to find new
things
.
For example
, employees of NASA, all the time try to go to space and discover and make a new house for humans. If they did not have
this
 mindset, they would not have discovered other planets. In conclusion, finding new
things
 or choosing the same way in
life
 have related to their mindset and their wishes.
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  • status quo
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • mastery
  • innovation
  • adaptability
  • personal growth
  • resilience
  • hesitancy
  • risk-taking
  • transitions
  • enrichment
  • equilibrium
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