In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping malls or centres to do their shopping. Does this have a positive or a negative development?

Nowadays, huge shopping complexes are constructed to decrease increasingly the numbers of local shops. I strongly believe that
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it has a disastrous effect on society. In
this
essay, the effects of shopping
centres
development on society will be evaluated. On one hand, constructing large shopping malls makes
people
comfortable to do shopping in one place at the least time.
This
means it will not be a time-consuming option.
However
, these
centres
have some negative effects that
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people
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this
positive point. The
first
positive influence is making an overcrowded area.
As a result
, traffic jams will
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and
consequently
,
people
strictly face a lot of problems for doing their daily routines.
On the other hand
, local shops sell their products
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a lower price,
however
, sellers in large shopping
centres
sell the same products at least two times more expensive.
This
is due to they must pay more tax and rent. The
last
effect is on elderly
people
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because they will not be able to
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centre for shopping. In conclusion, in
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centres
on
people
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evaluated.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • local shops
  • shopping malls
  • small businesses
  • community identity
  • economic impact
  • convenience
  • variety
  • shift towards
  • sustainable business models
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