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an essay presenting the pros and cons of teens using social media.

#teens #media
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Social
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 are used for communication, dating, media sharing, publishing reviews and reviews of goods or services,
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collective discussion, author writing, social bookmarking and exchange of views. The most popular are content sharing and communication
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. Today, their availability is determined by free registration and great opportunities. In your personal
profile
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 you can post photos and messages that do not violate the rules of the site, as well as promote your account, engage in advertising and business. It is difficult to imagine that a teenager is not registered in one or more social
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. They become a place for communication, dating and entertainment. Are children on social
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 dangerous for children? The advantages and disadvantages of these vacancies are discussed in more detail below. Their advantages, as a rule, include: Ability to communicate with friends and colleagues from a distance; search for lost contacts and new acquaintances. Social
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 are used as a means of self-development, learning foreign languages, reading interesting books, listening to music. In
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 respect, the potential of these sites is endless. Social
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 become places for learning, searching for scientific and other literature. With social
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 you can grow and develop your business,
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, to create your own online store. It is difficult to run a PR campaign, but the most important thing is to get started. And in no case do they get into trouble. These sites are a powerful source of useful information. All the
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 will find the benefits of it in social
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. Self-improvement, business development, profits are their main advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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