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Newspapers have an enormous influence on people’s opinions and ideas. Do you think it is a positive or negative situation?

#newspapers #influence #people’s #situation
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Newspapers
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 have a huge impact on
people
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's
belief
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beliefs
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 and the way they perceive things. In my opinion,
this
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 phenomenon is a positive one because it enlightens
people
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 with happenings around and the
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globe
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 and at the same time educates the public with authentic information and opportunities.
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,
newspaper
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the newspaper
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 is a medium through which
people
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 can get acquainted with adequate knowledge of what goes around. Similar to
televion
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television
, radio, and the internet,
newspaper
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the newspaper
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 is another effective media platform that carries informative news about current happenings in
local
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the local
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 and
internationa
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international
 scene, which can broaden readers' visions and open their minds.
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,
newspaper
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the newspaper
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 is beneficial to
people
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 who do not have access to other media platforms and can make them equally informed as others. Specifically,
people
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 from underdeveloped countries or rural areas where there is a constant
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 power or internet supply
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 can rely on
newspapers
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 as a source of information of ongoing pandemic.
People
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 can be educated and
benefited
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 through
newspapers
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 since the material is very reliable. Different from all kinds of posts, videos, and advertisements that pop up on the screen, information from
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 are more authentic and appropriate since
they
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it
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 can be sourced from a specific writer
from
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apply
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. It is
unneccessary
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unnecessary
 to worry about children being misdirected by inappropriate content or elders being deceived by fake posts from
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 since the authorized publishers are more trustworthy.
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, great jobs and scholarships are
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advertised
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advertized
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advertised
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 in
newspapers
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can
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that can
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 provide
people
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 with better career prospects and education opportunities, which can greatly improve readers' lives. In conclusion, there is doubt that
newspapers
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 can bring enormous positive impacts on humans, as
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 can widen
people
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's perspectives and spread great opportunities with credible materials.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • opinions
  • perspectives
  • crucial
  • informing
  • educating
  • biased
  • sensationalized
  • shape
  • attitudes
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