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The Grange
park
 was opened in 1920, a rectangular area with access from northside Arnold avenue and the Southside through Eldon street. There was a fountain stood at the middle and a stage for musicians situated left to centre, a glasshouse to the Eldon street entrance. There was a pond for
water
 plants at the northeast corner. Around the
park
, there were rose gardens with seats nearby where people can smell the flower and enjoy the music.
This
park
 has altered considerably since
then
. Now there is one large-ish rose garden occupying the centremost where the fountain stood with seats all around it. The bandstand has been replaced, by an amphitheatre for concerts and
associates
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 seating. The glasshouse has gone and it is a place for a
water
 feature.
Similarly
, where the pond stood, there is now a child's play area and cafe. Access to the
park
 is still via the original two entrances, but there is a new
third
 entrance near the
water
 feature from an underground car
park
. Despite the apparently significant changes ,
still
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 the
park
 retains the basic elements of flowers,
water
 and music seatings with the addition of a cafe' and a children's play area.
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