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Scientists believe that computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people find it is positive while others think it is a negative development. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People
 have different views about artificial intelligence will be more intelligent than human beings. While some argue that it has advantages or disadvantages development. I believe that it is a drawback negative sides to human beings.
On the other hand
, there are various reasons why
people
 believe that artificial intelligence has a positive development.
Firstly
, there is evidence to support the idea that the
computer
 makes everything in work and study easier.
Such
 as in study, when students do an exam, the
computer
 is used to calculate complex Math lessons.
Furthermore
, in the office, manipulations are used from computers faster than personal do.
Therefore
,
people
 will alleviate a large quantity of work and spend more time on themselves.
Secondly
, the service of technology provides housework more convenient on laundry, they can put the clothes on the washing machine
instead
 of by hand. Irrespective
these
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 arguments, I believe that
computer based
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 technology has drawbacks. The main reason for believing
this
 is that there will be increased unemployment if the service of artificial intelligence is widely used in every country. A
second
 point is that
people
 gradually depend on
computer
 technology and it makes them become more stagnant, idle, and foolish In conclusion, the
computer
 certainly has its advantages, but I personally prefer that drawbacks outweigh them in a long term, in which because it makes the rate of unemployment increase. Given
this
 situation, it is recommended that...
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