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At the present time the population of some country include large number of young adult compared with no of older people do ou think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

#time #population #country #adult #people #ou #outweigh
Qualitative (Table 2) and quantitative analysis (Table 3) were conducted to study the range of
compounds
 of Avicennia marina at different maceration
time
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 and
organ
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. The
results
 showed that
phenolic
 and
flavonoid
compounds
 are present in all
extracts
 of Avicennia marina, yet saponin
compounds
 are not detected in both leaves and stems.
This
 can occur because
phenolic
 and
flavonoid
compounds
 have the same polarity with the solvent used, causing those
compounds
 to dissolve easily in the solvent.
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 findings are in line with previous
study
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such
 as Fajri et al. (2021) who reported that
saponin
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 belonging to
non-polar
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compound
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 can not dissolve in
the
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polar solvents like methanol, ethanol, or water.
Similarly
, Manurung et al. (2017) reported that
phenolic
 and
flavonoid
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 detected in all different parts of Ficus deltoidea extracted using methanol solvent,
while
 the saponin
compounds
 remained absent. The
results
 obtained from qualitative analysis of phytochemical
compounds
 among all
extracts
 are shown in Table 3. The total
phenolic
 content (TPC) which experiences a steady increase in both leaves and stem
extracts
 ranges from 0.000221 to 0.000902 mg/g. Meanwhile, the total
flavonoid
 content ranged from 0.000202 to 0.000905 mg/g.
In contrast
 to
phenolic
compounds
, the total
flavonoid
 content (TFC) in leaves and stems shows different responses as the extraction
time
 increases. TFC in the leaf
extracts
 fluctuates over
time
while
 a slight drop is observed in the stem
extracts
. These
results
 are in line with some previous works on the topic, which reported that the alteration of phytochemical
compounds
 happens throughout the plant organs. A study on the phytochemical compound of Momordica charantia (Malik, 2019) revealed that the occurrence of some bioactive
compounds
 differs in each extraction
time
 interval. Similar
results
 were
also
 found by Fajfri (2021), Permatasari (2020), and Dewi (2022) who reported changes in
phenolic
 and
flavonoid
 concentration in different
time
 periods.
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introduction conclusion present
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logical structure
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clear comprehensive ideas
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relevant specific examples
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supported main points
The main points are well-supported with relevant details and evidence, demonstrating a thorough understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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