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Museums and art galleries should focus on works that show the history and culture of their own country rather than works of other parts of the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Art
have
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 been one of the most important and suspicious parts of human’s life. It is able to show the
history
 or event that changed society’s life.
However
, nowadays most
people
 believe that it would be better for museums and
art
galleries
 to focus on spreading
culture
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the culture
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 and
history
 of their homeland. I agree with
this
 opinion and think that it would be great if
such
 organizations focused on it. As said before,
art
 is one of the most ancient and popular ways of spreading your ideas.
Art
galleries
 mostly focus on the work of young artists who need support. I think it would be great to provide
art works
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artworks
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 that represent
history
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the history
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 of
Kazakh
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the Kazakh
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 nation and show the
people
 who live there. It can spread
peculiarities
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the peculiarities
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 of
country
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the country
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 and attract the attention of foreigners.
People
 will recognize
country
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the country
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 and have
interest
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an interest
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 in it if
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they
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the
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they
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 know about their
culture
 and
history
.
Also
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 it will be patriotic care about
country
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the country
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. Traditions and cultural peculiarities, national characteristics can
also
 be represented in
a different ways
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different ways
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. Young
people
 are
also
 interested in
art
 and they enjoy
galleries
, online or live, they always try to find things that will give them inspiration and motivation to act. Publishing and providing
culture
 by
art
galleries
 will help to cultivate patriotism in the hearts of young
people
 and present
history
 and
culture
 in a more modern form. All in all, providing
history
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a history
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 of own
country
 is efficient and have a big amount of advantages. From my point of view, it will be great if all museums and
galleries
 supported
this
 idea and it would help
people
 to learn more about their homeland
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