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In the last decade, there has been a great increase in the number and variety of online courses available to adults. This has been welcomed as a great opportunity by many students, however, other students see these courses as less effective than classroom teaching. What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying an online course?

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In
this
 21st century from
last
 10 years
education
 sector received a huge demand for online
courses
 in different types of
education
 fields in teenagers.
This
 type of opportunity was mostly prefered by many
students
,
however
, some
students
 believe that it was
waste
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 of money and time rather than online study, offline classes are far better. The facts of the thesis will be elaborated
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 upcoming paragraphs. Considered Broadly, There is lots of benefit in online
courses
, basically online study is far better and convenient for every individual student. As well as, online
courses
 can be done from any place or any part of a country at your favourable time, many adults start
courses
 together with
there
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 job so they can easily complete their course without leaving their job. For
an
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example, due to the pandemic situation
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 earth all of the top institutions come forward on online
education
 and provide
education
 to any part of the world through the internet, many online
education
 platforms provide top university
courses
 in
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 application or websites. Due to the Covid - 19 situation all schools and colleges were closed by the government officials. Talking about the drawbacks of online
education
, there is a group of some
students
 that are not interested in online
education
, some of them just start the class on their devices but parallelly they start doing other work they did not concentrate on classes because they know no one staring on them.
Moreover
, some people are not much financial stronger than they can afford course fees and online resources expenses. For an instance, in India during the lockdown
period
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 most of the
institution
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institutions
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 was started online classes but there were many
students
 that have
a
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residence in remote areas that had no proper network coverage in their area, these
type
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of
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students
 deprived of online
education
 due to the lack of proper resources. To conclude, online
education
 is far better and convenient for everyone but the government should look forward to providing proper resources for every student so they can easily continue their study from anywhere it will
also
 help to increase the literacy rate of the country.
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