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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
past
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 time
railways
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 were the main source of
transportation
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 due to the wide network of
railways
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was
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being
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 expanded in the whole country. One school of thought reckons that the government officials should spend more budget on
railways
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 rather than constructing
roads
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. I completely agree with
this
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 given notion. The facts of the thesis will be elaborated
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 upcoming paragraphs. Considered Broadly,
Railways
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 playing a major role of
transportation
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 in goods or raw material as well as it
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carry
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 a huge number of passenger from one place to another.
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,
railways
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 are cheap and
convient
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convenient
 mode of
transportation
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 it already has
wide
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a wide
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 network of
railway
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the railway
a railway
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 line that was mostly
contructed
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constructed
 in 20th century during the British rule.
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,
railways
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 adopting latest machinery and improving the trains to run on electricity by use of advanced technology. For an instance, In India mostly trains run on coal energy but engineers improve the engines and constructed them to work on electric power. Nowadays, Indian
railways
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 almost adopted
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electric engines.
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,
Railways
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 are constantly doing
upgradation
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up-gradation
 in their technology field not only manufacture of railway lines is improved but
also
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 it does not pollute our environment.
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, the methods of constructing a new street are still an old method
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highly
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a highly
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 time-consuming process and
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 the preparation of raw material to make new
roads
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 release high amount harmful gases in
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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. To illustrate, nowadays if the
transportation
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 minister says to make new
roads
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 and railway lines, so track lines can be easily prepared with highly advanced automation and machines but on
other
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the other
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 side construction of
road
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the road
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 is too hassle process and
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 harm
environment
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the environment
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.
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,
roads
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 are
more
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busier than
railways
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 so
its
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it
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 take more time
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to reach
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reach
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 from one destination to another. To conclude,
railways
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 improvement is cheaper
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then
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than
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 road construction
as well as rail line development
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, as well as rail line development,
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 is
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 eco friendly whereas, while road construction it releases harmful gases and takes longer time to develop.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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