Social media badly impact our relationships. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Based on the current technologies, we can access many social
media
.
Also
, most
people
have many accounts on different social
media
such
as
Facebook
, Instagram, Twitter, and Youtube. All social
media
share the main aim is to link
people
between
people
and connect to the world.
Therefore
, I can not agree that social
media
brings negative impacts on our relationships with
friends
or family. In the following, I would like to express my viewpoints on
this
statement.
First
, through social
media
, we can know-how is our
friends
doing with their
Facebook
or Instagram posts quickly and directly. After we see their post, we can leave a reply message or comment to them. Many of my
friends
love to share their daily and travel photos in their accounts. Through their pictures, I feel interested and happy about their lives and feel a strong relationship with my
friends
. Sometimes, my
friends
express their emotions on social
media
,
such
as feeling stressed from schoolwork.
Then
, I can give them some words of encouragement, support them and let them know I am standing with them.
This
year, I am doing my exchange in Finland so social
media
is the only way for me to connect with my
friends
.
For example
,
last
week was my friend's birthday, and I used the tools in
Facebook
to send an e-birthday card to celebrate her birthday.
Moreover
,
Facebook
provides a function to me that can mark all the important days and when the day comes, it will remind me. Based on the help of
this
function, I can share my happiness with my
friends
more than the previous time.
However
, amount of
people
believe that social
media
would harm their relationships about how many followers or likes number they earn. But to me, all the numbers are not a vital part of our friendships. As
a real
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a real friend
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friends
, we need to take care of and help each other regardless of any situation.
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