Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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There are many bad times where

people

feel that there is nothing to proceed in a certain situation and they should accept the failure.

However

, some

people

believe that everyone should try hard to improve

such

situations. I partially agree with the latter statement because if

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little efforts of hard work is possible and it leads to success

then

why should anyone face the hard times ? On the one hand, there are humongous numbers of

people

suffering from hard times

such

as less amount of money or unsatisfactory job. Many factors are responsible for

such

scenerio

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scenario

when there is nothing

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and a person have to accept it in order to move on in life because unacceptance will lead to stress, mental disorder and suicidal thoughts. If a senior employee working in a factory

have

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to perform some physical work, there can be a possibility that the employee gets failed and with low performance could lose the job. The person is the most experienced employee of the factory some impossible tasks need to be accepted as unfeasible.

On the other hand

, Some

people

believe that nothing is impossible. They think that if we face a failure

then

there might be a possibility that we have not tried harder enough so, using

this

ideology the

people

try harder and harder until they do not succeed.

For example

, a gym freak would keep on working out till he reaches the goal. Using

such

strategy

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stress, mental

disorder

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can be tacked as all the focus would be on trying hard and there will not be any thoughts of

self harm

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. In my conclusion, it might

also

be true to accept the failure if the situation is impossible because there can be some medical danger. It is

evient

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evident

event

that our

priorty

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priority

should be our health and if a bad

sitution

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situation

is doable

then

we should keep on trying and never give up.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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