Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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There are many bad times where
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feel that there is nothing to proceed in a certain situation and they should accept the failure.
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, some
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believe that everyone should try hard to improve
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situations. I partially agree with the latter statement because if
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little efforts of hard work is possible and it leads to success
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why should anyone face the hard times ? On the one hand, there are humongous numbers of
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suffering from hard times
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as less amount of money or unsatisfactory job. Many factors are responsible for
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a
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when there is nothing
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and a person have to accept it in order to move on in life because unacceptance will lead to stress, mental disorder and suicidal thoughts. If a senior employee working in a factory
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to perform some physical work, there can be a possibility that the employee gets failed and with low performance could lose the job. The person is the most experienced employee of the factory some impossible tasks need to be accepted as unfeasible.
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, Some
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believe that nothing is impossible. They think that if we face a failure
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there might be a possibility that we have not tried harder enough so, using
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ideology the
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try harder and harder until they do not succeed.
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, a gym freak would keep on working out till he reaches the goal. Using
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stress, mental
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can be tacked as all the focus would be on trying hard and there will not be any thoughts of
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. In my conclusion, it might
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be true to accept the failure if the situation is impossible because there can be some medical danger. It is
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evident
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that our
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should be our health and if a bad
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situation
is doable
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we should keep on trying and never give up.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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