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Some people believe that happiness and emotional maturity are more important than physical health, while others disagree. **Discuss** both views and give your opinion.

#people #happiness #maturity #health #**discuss**
These days, more and more
people
 became conscious about(aware of) physical health. We see a flood of commercials on healthy products and gyms in our daily lives, and many of them make us believe that body strength is the one and only critical matter. It would be true that our lives heavily depend on our physical strength,
however
, I strongly argue that mental satisfaction is by far essential to our quality of life. In the modern world, most social activities in families, schools, companies are organized for citizens who are fit. To my sadness, handicappers are not likely to offer as many choices as those of others, which often let them give up their wishes and desires.
In addition
,
people
 with serious illnesses have limited time to spend with friends and family, which
On the other hand
,
mindset
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 has a large potential to overcome physical disabilities. Elderly
people
 who have physical problems could enjoy their lives if they think in positive ways.
Furthermore
, After the 2020 Tokyo Paralympic,
people
 are more aware of physical diversity, which improves the social environment.
In addition
,
people
 with physical disorders could spend more quality time with family, which
otherwise
 they would not have. In conclusion, how you think is more important than how healthy you are to improve your quality of life. An optimistic way of thinking would not only contribute to
interpret
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 the negative physical situation into the positive nuance.
Also
,
people
 would spare more family time when they are under the weather.
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