Governments should spend money on rails rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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The governmental
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budget
should be invested on
rails
rather
roads
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by official authorities. I believe that allocating money for establishing or developing
roads
is more important than
rails
. On the one hand,
railway
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the railway
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system needs special infrastructure
such
as
rails
and wagons as well as enough space to set them.
Therefore
, it cannot be used all over the country especially in high hills or mountain
region
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.So, the route which is covered by train could be limited.
Besides
due to
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the cost
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of maintaining and expanding the system, it is not economical to use it in small cities or remote areas with few commuters.
On the other hand
, developing
roads
needs less
budget
rather than
rails
therefore
it is more accessible for the governments especially in the poor or even underprivileged countries. It means that with less
budget
, it could be possible to cover more areas with
roads
and many people can access
to
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this modes
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of transport.
Additionally
, in busy cities like metropolitan, because of space
limitation
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limitations
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, there is
no
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enough space to set the infrastructure for railway systems so it is more beneficial to establish a road in noisy cities. Meanwhile,
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the road
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road
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roads
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can be used by different kinds of
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the vehicle
a vehicle
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vehicle
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vehicles
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such
as
car
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cars
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, bus and
truck
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which means that a large number of people and companies benefit from
roads
compare
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to
rails
. In conclusion, from
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an economical
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economical
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point of view,
budget
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the budget
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which is allocated on
roads
can be more beneficial both for people and companies because with less money and infrastructure
government
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the government
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can establish more
roads
that can cover all around a country from
mountain
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the mountain
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region to remote area.
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