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Task 2: Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. Some think they should begin at at least 7 years old. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #children #education #age #think #years
In the competition age, people, today, do not want to become a loser.
Therefore
,
children
 become the trainee to run
this
race
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 game.
However
, there is an ongoing debate about what
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age is suitable for formal schooling. In my opinion, everyone has their own pace
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 learning. One standpoint is that the golden time for learning of human brain is around 3-6 years old. At that time, the young
children
's memory
as
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 a sponge to absorb a large
amount
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 of new things. The fact is how people catch
this
 period for their little
children
. Like Hong Kong helicopter parents who urge their
children
 to join many pursuits around two-year-old in order to get a seat at a
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 kindergarten.
Therefore
, pupils use pencils
in
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correct
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 gesture to write complicated Chinese words
that
is
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 not suggested by
educational
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 board. Parents are proud of their
children
 in a good banding primary and secondary school.
Thus
, a popular belief is that earlier educated would be superior.
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 the other hand, childhood should be joyful. Learning is fun;
children
 acquire
a knowledge
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knowledge
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 or skill through
the
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fascinating games.
Therefore
, they would learn neutrally by
interaction
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 with
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their companion
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companion
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companions
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.
For example
, Sweden
children
's primary school lives are in a pleasurable atmosphere. From school, they learn how to play and how to create a game to play. Schoolmates are friends, not
a competitors
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competitors
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.
This
 kind of education
to
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produce people's
creativities
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creativity
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on
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in
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 works. Like their familiar
glocers
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grocers
glaciers
 and furniture stall, Ikea, always
develop
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 new designs on their products. In conclusion, too early schooling is making
childern
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children
 that might find difficult in learning content as well as losing interest on studying.
As a result
, their
children
 spend time on boring and stressful learning. It is not wise to push earlier studying on preschoolers.
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