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The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. School should cut art and music out of the cirriculum so that children can focus on useful subjects such as information technology. To what extent do you agree?

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Education's goal is to train pupils for life in the modern world. Some people believe that
art
 and
music
 should be dropped from the curriculum so that
students
 can focus on more important disciplines like information technology. I am in total disagreement with
this
 notion that these kinds of subjects,
for instance
,
music
 and
art
 should be cut out of the education program for involving
students
 in technological disciplines.
First
 of
all
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 it is undeniable fact that every student has their own unique interest and talent in any field, and most
students
 need leisure and rest, and painting and
music
 can be the best and most useful ones.
Likewise
,
students
 need to learn the craft and singing to enter the modern world because these are unique talents and some
students
 like to study in
this
 field and see a better future for themselves in
this
 field, and in some
situations
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 these subjects are the most favourite for the children .
Moreover
,
students
 are not robots that we plan at school. All humans need to rest, and the best rest and leisure for
students
 is to play an instrument or a handicraft. Among a number of heavy and light
lessons
,
students
 need easier
lessons
 and
art
 can be the best for them. A school is a place for
students
 to learn, and the
students
' interest in these
lessons
 is
also
 important. To sum up, the school should prepare the
students
 for the modern world, but
this
 does not mean that it should take them away from
music
 and
art
. Pay more attention to these
lessons
, so that
students
 can develop both their valuable leisure skills and their talents.
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