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the information about buying coffee and tea and drinking habit of people in five various Australian cities.

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The given bar chart illustrates the information about buying
coffee
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 and tea and the drinking habit of people in five various Australian cities. Overall, the number of people who bought bot
coffee
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 and tea was the most in all five cities. According to the chart, it can be seen that Melbourne, Sydney and Hobart had the majority amount of the population who went to a cafe for
coffee
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 and tea, which was approximately over 65%.
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 figure was gradual higher than the corresponding figure of 55% in Brisbane and under 50% in Adelaide. While the rate of the population who bought instant
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 in the
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 4 weeks was the
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 high, Hobart indicated the majority rate, almost 55%.
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 figure was followed by Brisbane, just over 50%; Adelaide ,exactly 50%; Melbourne, just under 50%; Sydney droned 45%. Mover, all five cities’ people bought the least of fresh
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. Sydney and Melbourne reported the highest amount which Accounted for approximately 44% and 42% respectively, while Hobart showed around 38%.
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, Brisbane and Adelaide both indicated a rate of approximately 34%.
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