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Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven year old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Which suitable age
children
 should start their education at
school
 is a controversial issue. While I understand that
children
 staying at
home
 until the age of six or seven bring several
benefit
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, I strongly believe that they should go to
school
 at the earliest. On
one
 hand, staying at
home
 until reaching six or seven brings
children
 some advantages.
Firstly
,
children
obtained
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home
 education before attending
to
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grade
one
 might have a better background than other pupils.
This
 is because their parents allow them to spend their daily time
to teach
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 their son or daughter
one
 by
one
. Another advantage is that
this
 group of
children
 might have more
confident
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comparing
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 with pupils going to class soon. They are mature, so they could have
a
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stronger mental and physical health.
On the other hand
, there are two main reasons parents should bring their
children
 to
school
 as soon as possible.
First
 of all,
children
 leaving their family soon have to learn the way
adapting
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with
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new
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the new
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 environment. Schooling environment
give
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 them more opportunity to make friends, be familiar with classes and lessons soon.
Consequently
, they are able to improve their social relationship and many helpful skills.
For example
, they can learn how to perform alone or with friends, and participate in various healthy activities at
school
.
Secondly
, parents can save time in taking care of
children
, so they are able to acquire a more flexible schedule for their job.
As a result
, they could ensure their income and cover their life. In conclusion, I firmly argue that the benefit of
children
 going to
school
 as soon as possible
outweigh
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 that of staying at
home
 until they reach the age of six or seven.
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